"Finding Hope"
We
were walking through the mall when my foot hits something, sending whatever it
was skittering down the corridor. Joan
and I both heard the clink clink clink
of metal hitting a trash can and bouncing off the bench where middle-aged
husbands seem to congregate. We exchange
a “What was that?” look. Then I start to
grin, and we both take off running, acting more like kids than the actual kids
in the mall.
Trying to follow a straight line
from the dad bench, I race at an awkward angle, looking at the ground. I scoop up the only metal object on the dirty
tile floor seconds before Joan comes rushing over.
“Aha! Mine!” I shout triumphantly. She shushes me as we’re starting to get
“looks” from the other mall patrons.
“Yes, but what is it?”
“Good question.” I open my hand and discover a rather beat up
and dented ring. Joan and I both just
stare at it for a moment, letting the disappointment sink in.
“A ring,” she says.
“A ring,” she says.
“Yeah.”
“A dirty ring.”
“Yeah.”
“How very Hobbit-y of you.”
I smirk back at her. “Funny girl.”
“Hey,” she says, picking at the ring
just sitting in my palm, minding its own business, “it looks like something is
engraved on it.”
“Really? You’re going to go there? Okay, fine.”
I clear my throat and attempt my best Ian McKellen impression: “One
ring to rule them all / One ring to find them –“
“No, seriously.” Joan both grabs the
ring and smacks at me to shut me up. She
holds the ring close to her face, squinting at it a bit, then holds it so I can
see it. “Look.”
Engraved, no, scratched crudely into the world’s ugliest ring are four letters,
evenly spaced around it:
H – O – P – E
I blink. “Huh.”
“You found hope,” Joan smiles.
“Or,” I say, taking the ring from
her and turning it slightly, “I found OPEH.”
Joan laughs. “OPEH, like opa! Oooh, let’s have Greek
food for lunch!” she says, linking her arm through mine. And then we’re off in search of gyros and
saganaki; I shove Hope in my pocket, not giving it a second thought, although
my heart and footsteps feel just a tad lighter.
Without telling Joan, I clean
Hope. It doesn’t improve its looks. It’s still dented and scratched, but that
doesn’t stop me from carrying it in my pocket where ever I go. One day I look down, contemplating a
manicure, and realize that I’m wearing Hope. When did
that happen? Ashamed, I shove my
hand back in my pocket.
That
night, while lying in bed, I stare at Hope on my hand again. Joan, who swears that she is “too delicate
and ladylike” to snore, is snoring lightly next to me. I stare at Hope, trying not to disturb
Joan. I suddenly wonder all of the
things we didn’t wonder when we found it.
Who does it belong to? How did it get there? I’m a little surprised that neither of us
even considered dropping it into the mall’s Lost & Found. Maybe I
should give it back?
But
I don’t want to give it back.
The
realization that I don’t want to give up Hope is sobering, even though I
chuckle at my pun, causing Joan to shift in her sleep. I suddenly start listing everyone in the
world who needs Hope more than I do – starving children, abused kittens, burn
victims. I sigh and start to take off
Hope. That’s when I can see that it has
turned my finger green.
Okay, I'm not saying this just because we're old friends, but I found your story more enjoyable to read than the one that actually won. After reading the Reborn story I was left with a So What feeling -- it felt more like a really good beginning to a story and I like my flash fiction pieces to have a firm beginning, middle, and end - not unlike your story.
ReplyDeleteI'm glad you published your story here for others to read - gives me the courage to finish my short pieces and launch my own blog sooner rather than later, so thank you!